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Reigning (profile) wrote,
on 11-8-2003 at 11:59am
Music: Puddle of Mudd - She Fuckin' Hates Me (God I hate this song)
Sitting Alone
In a motionless state
She stared at the wall
Cursing her fate

Her face red and blotchy
With signs of tear stains
The more pain she feels
The harder it rains

For a storm is outside
Of Destruction and fury
Emotions then rose
And she grew a bit teary

The passionate storm
Unleasing its hell
Had a fiery ardor
As you can tell

It shared this furvor
With another fierce passion
One building inside her
In a strong angry fashion

She did nothing
Just kept it inside
It grew every day
Became harder to hide

Suddenly it came out
In one huge explosion
But she no longer cared
Her heart was frozen


I didn't finish this poem because it was getting long and I don't like it anyway.
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t0mato

11-15-03 12:08pm

Sitting Alone
In a motionless state
She stared at the wall
Cursing her fate

Her face red and blotchy
With signs of tear stains
The more pain she feels
The harder it rains



i really like this part of it..the rest seems to ramble, ya know? Maybe you could work with those two lines, and make it better.

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